Friday, 8 July 2016
Thursday, 7 July 2016
Term 2 Writing Samples!!!
This term we have been looking at ways to make our writing more interesting for the reader.
We have used the folllowing criteria to guide us:
- Changing the word order of a sentence
- Using literary devices such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia and personification
- Using specific verbs and adjectives
- Using show, don’t tell techniques
- Using different sentence beginnings and lengths
Emotions
Angry: As Oakley laid the ball to me I sprinted at it got control of it and headed for the goal. I shot, it was heading for the top left corner, as it bounced of the crossbar I erupted like a volcano and my face was red hot like lava.
Sad: I was crying as hard as I had ever cried before. My tears sprayed over my body it felt like I was having a shower. By the time I had calmed down I was drenched in tears. I opened the door and walked down the hallway. “What's wrong hon”. “Cameron’s what's wrong” I replied. “He’s a total idiot, and I mean it”.
Happy: It was christmas day. I was the most HAPPIEST person in the world. I got chocolates, clothes and a whole lot of other stuff. But earlier in the morning I found a note on the table saying “there might be something in the shed”.So after I opened my smaller presents I went out to the shed. When I got to the shed I opened the door and there leaning against wall was a Scott Genius LT Plus. It was amazing.
The Butterfly and the Baby Bear……
In The Hall Of The Mountain King!!!
On a cold misty morning a Baby Bear is slowly waking. A butterfly flutters and dips around the leaves surrounding baby bear.
Baby Bear sees the butterfly out the corner of his eye and rolls his head around as it flies in circles. The Baby bear squeals and jumps up and down.
Baby Bear’s mother hadn't realized that he had woken up
As the Bear and the Butterfly were playing the baby bear hears rustling and thrashing sounds in the bushes and slows to a complete stop. Out of nowhere a huge male grizzly was standing in front of the There was nothing he could do, but there was something that the butterfly could do. Quickly the butterfly reacted and flew into the bear's ear, making the grizzly bear angry and annoyed. As the butterfly was doing that the baby bear had ran and got his mother that was freaking out trying to find him. And in the end the big men grizzly bear had walked off confused about what just happened and the baby bear and butterfly were fine!!!
This is the song that goes with the story!!!
Viking Girl
She slams the door and looks into a little mirror in her room and yells “ why does nobody like my viking costume” as she stares into the mirror with her eyebrows down and eyes facing up. She sees her older brother pushing the door open slowly. As quick as lightning she ramms the door shut with her viking helmet. Two holes appear in the door, she hears stomping as her mum stomps up the stairs. She feels sad and starts to cry.
Tired / Dizzy
I awoke from my sleep. I looked at my alarm clock, the last time I looked at it it was 11:42 and know it was 11:51, I had 9 minutes of sleep. I took my covers off me and went down to the bathroom and looked in the mirror. My eyes were bloodshot and it looked liked a bird had made a nest in my hair. I felt so sleepy and drained, i needed a drink. So I went to the fridge and got the jug fuel of water out. As I tipped some of the water into the cup I started to feel dizzy and as that was happening I realized that had spilt half the jug full of water onto the bench.
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Sam Landacre 2016
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